Talk:Kol Corythus/@comment-26087580-20170416141807

well, what to say? I can see you're trying to get away with your roots with downer protagonists(Ipersonally thought Yami was the one who you tried to introduce you away from the downer protagonists), Kol is anice character,

but I see you're trying a little too hard for him to be the 'cool kind of edgy', being all perverted and gluttonous. Nothing wrong with that, by this kind contrasts with narcissism since being that means you're self-centered and egotistical, so no reason for admiring others or NOT care about your appearance. The egotistical side was a nice touch.

The thing is, you can be a cool edgy, but you need to control some attributes so they don't contradict each other. My only issue with your writing is this: maybe sometimes you want to focus many attributes in a single character, which is understandable cuz is an OC