Talk:Eternal Spear X/@comment-36359459-20180901210736/@comment-26087580-20180901230030

Okay, here's my feedback: Your Sacred Gear is dud.

First of all, it fails on every level to stay true to anything in canon considering it's a pokémon-based sacred gear. I know Ishibumi is a pokémon-otaku but that does not justify using a pokémon for a sacred gear at all. Also, why would God of the Bible use his own heavenly spear to create a sacred gear considering that he's able to do that out of apparent nothing. Sounds counterproductive to use something you use to do your own job and give it to someone else. Also, God did not create sacred gears "for the good of all life on Earth", but to bestow the power to do miracles onto humans. If giving your own spear of light used to create life and light is not counterproductive, I don't know what is. Also, why would God 'request' a beast to be sealed inside a Sacred Gear? Regardless of reasons, 'to seal' a beast means to cut down its free will and condemn it to a life inside a weapon which can be used for other causes besides its own, and I doubt even a creature as powerful as "Heavenly Life Paragon" would agree to that.

Now, onto it's abilities: They are dumb and broken. I mean, really? Bringing someone back to life with a measly time limit and with the condition to use someone else's life? If they are in a battlefield, which I can assume they'd be, bringing someone else with the life of an enemy is easy. Not to mention, "the Power of Creation allows the user to create any object or restore a previously destroyed object back to its former state. The Power of Creation also retains the ability to restore power, energy, and stamina to an object or person, making it useful for support tactics." is just lazy writing, because what's the point of a plot or even conflict if the protag can create things out of thin air and make his allies fight undertemidtly by using the restoration? Also, what do you mean by "His Revealing Light, which compels any and all persons to tell the truth, this is especially effective against Devils"? It doesn't make any sense considering that they will tell the true, so it's an effect on everyone. Also, with the lack of description, I can only assume the Balance Breaker only makes the user a shiny walking armor and nothing else.

So that's it. My feedback. Your sacred gear is broken, dull, dud and fails so many levels in being corporated into canon or even into dxd's lore, it's not even funny. I would suggest something to improve it, but unfortunately with it's current format and abilities, it cannot be possible. I suggest you start over, that's the only way to come up with some improvement.,