Talk:Alex Gremory/@comment-180.249.118.233-20190716151143

So.... i stumbled upon your fanfic in wattpad, i originally wanted to make a review because, but it need an account. Then i found this page and decide to review it here.

I honestly had no idea where to start because it's just that bad, twilight level of bad... maybe below it.

Let's start with the grammar; there are so many typo and stuff that it was cringeworthy. You should master your english.

There are way to many information in your story. The main rule in making a great story is "show not tell", basically, you should show what are these character doing instead of telling the reader of what they do.

Your oc is not good. Yet, another replacement for issei... i can't say anything really. It's just that bad.

Everyone is out of character in this fic... like most dxd fic. Again, i have no idea what should i say because there are so many problem.

A simple advice i take somewhere; be creative not simple, use the source material(the light novel, not the anime) for reference...