Thread:WarriorMan199456/@comment-30589841-20180509214445/@comment-27657118-20180509231359

The story's actually pretty well-executed. I like the bits of comedy you placed in here. As for criticism, I don't really have a lot of them, only for Issei's speech during the chapter. It's moslty in line in how he speaks in Rise of the Solar God, but he'd be a lot more cautious around Amatsu-Mikaboshi, and try to be as respectful as possible. Even if he's heard of Izanami's words about Mikaboshi, he'd still try to be careful and choose his words carefully, especially if he and Yoru can sense her power.