Thread:Houki Minami/@comment-25201774-20170812022639/@comment-26709288-20170813011409

If you feel the story is so terrible, I recommend just re-writing the story. But to be fair, I believe you're being harsh on yourself.

Should all the Shirou's in different stories really have the exact same personalities?

Shirou in VDL worked well as the playboy harem guy, I actually enjoyed his character. The only problem I had with him was that he was too weak but I assumed that was a planned role by you and you planned to give Shirou a power boost later down the road but then you revealed it wasn't a calculated idea when you wrote that message stating you were quitting the story and given the reasons. But I actually understand why you quit, most of your readers complained about him being so weak and complained that his harem was too big for a fanfiction story and that girls were going to get sidelined.

The reason people love DRR is because Shirou is pretty interesting as a character. He has a badboy "I don't give a fuck attitude" at the start of the story but overtime we see him unravel as much more of a character. We see that he actually has feelings and actually cares about those around him. And then when we learn of his past, we see it has a ACTUAL EFFECT ON HIM (instead of other stories where they most use tragic pasts as a way to garnish sympathy for a gary-stu character, Shirou's tragic past actually impacts him in the story). When I was re-writing HDKR I had DRR in mind when thinking about how I wanted my character's tragic past to affect him. Overall this Shirou isn't that bad of a character, he has his faults but we still see good parts of his character all the time and he's a good mix of strong that was lacking in Vanishing Dragon. I also thought him being hated by literally everyone around Kuoh was a interesting touch, something that isn't shown in most stories for their OC to be hated by almost everyone.

I haven't read that much of Deliquency to actually give a comment on this Shirou. But to sum up my opinion, you shouldn't beat yourself up because DRR Shirou isn't a mirror of Deliquency of Red. But to be fair, I do wish he kept his badboy persona a bit longer before we started dealing with his tragic past and stuff like that. In my story I guess I avoided "revealing too much too early" by simply throwing a large chunk of his past out in the prologue.

TL;DR you're a good writer and you write interesting and excellent characters so don't beat yourself up if you feel like a character isn't living to a high enough standard. However, if you feel like you need a re-do then write it over. I'm writing my story over for the FOURTH time (I started writing in 2012 and I'm not even finished with the first arc of my main story) so who am I to judge? Also, I'm sure your fans will forgive you because your stories always come out better each time.