Talk:Sengal Nergal/@comment-35675122-20181107102218/@comment-35700948-20181108081025

From what I can read right now, he's coming out pretty alright. To have a character be inspired by the belief that power can't make you happy is pretty cool and though he is incredibly strong, he can actually be easy to beat because of the fact that he doesn't want to live... as much as everyone else, I guess.

I'd say your heading in the right direction, though I'd fix the mountain of text that the beginning is and space it out into two, or maybe three paragraphs. Fix some grammatical errors, and then add in everything else, and he should be good to go. Of course, the rest depends on what else you have planned for him, though a lot of thought goes into a character, and even though there isn't much here, I can already tell you thought a lot about what this character is about, his abilities, his backstory, etcetera. I'm looking forward to seeing him completed, so let's just hope no more unexpected circumstances happen, huh?