Talk:Aden D. Bael (The Lovable Devil)/@comment-26181809-20161126105515

Hate to be a bit of a jerk, but you should try to be a bit more original. Don't get me wrong, I'm not criticisng you for using Rai as a template, what I am seeing as a bit of a flaw is (essentially) copy and pasting the names of various things from Noblesse (e.g. the title of Noblesse, Lukedonia, Ye Ran, and the general template of Rai's name (although, in your defence, Cadis Etrama di Raizel is a pretty sweet name)). I can't tell if they're placeholders or whatever, but I'd say try to get rid of them ASAP to make the character more of your own and as far away of an expy of Rai as possible.