Thread:Mirrordeath/@comment-24.84.135.107-20171106052239/@comment-26709288-20171120221833

My problem with your story is that you tried to make this serious, Game of Thrones Apocalypse type of story (with executions, politics, and all that fun stuff) but all the characters in my opinion are jokes. If you're gonna try to create this serious type of story, using a bunch of wacky personalities instead of focusing on the dark theme of the story ruins it for me.

You also took alot of work from Supernatural and Dominion when creating your angels but the only way those two series make the OP Angels work so well is because it's established in their lore. However using DxD Lore but having overwanked angels is just ridiculous.

But if your complaint is that nobody likes your story, and your only goal is to write a popular story then how about just writing a bunch of 1st chapters and pick the story that gets the most positive feedback?